Morgan Paulson
Immigration and Cultural Music Trends:
I enjoyed reading your Immigration and Cultural Music Trends post. You started off strong which immediately grabbed my attention and made me want to keep reading. You displayed a nice even flow through-out you're writing, which made it easy to read. I also like that you raised some very interesting points, I can tell that you really understood your subject matter. I noticed that you did not give any current examples in today's music that would back-up your claims, and you also had a few grammar errors with a few misplaced comas, but other than that you did a good job on this post.
High-Heeled Madness:
Your High Heeled Madness was very entertaining. The telling of your story flowed nicely and made me feel like I was right there with you. You did a great job describing and sequencing events. I am also tall, 5'10, so I could really relate to your story with the high heel and towering over everyone. Its one of the reasons why I stick to flats, converses, flip-flops, and anything with a low heel. I really enjoyed reading this post.
April Page
Product Failure:
I enjoyed reading your Product Failures post. I can really relate to your story about your phone. My phone does some of the same things. I will be talking or texting someone and the next moment I am staring at a blank screen, its one of the worst things about having a cellphone. You did a great job describing your events, it did however get a little confusing at the end. For me it wasn't clear if the guard or the fall was the reason for your teammates broken ankle. But other than that you did a great job with this post.
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