Week 7 Blog Reviews

Justin:

9/28-9/30

I really enjoyed reading your post on 9/28. I personally found your story of you helping your brother with his problems a great example. It showed the subtle differences in the way males and female talk with one another. 

I also liked reading your post on marriage, it had very strong opinions and ideas. I agreed with a lot of your views, that marriage is an old traditions that is not really necessary for survival in today's society. I think that you can improve on expanding some of those great ideas. This post was a bit vague you didn't go into great detail. There were also a few spelling mistakes, second paragraph, last sentence you said that, "Divorce is over fifty prevent in this country" and I think you meant to say percent. Other than that you did a really good job. 

Armando:

9/28-9/30

I enjoyed reading your post this week. In your 9/28 post you gave a great example of the differences between males and females, communication between the two can be difficult and awkward at times, and the scenario you wrote showed that perfectly. I think there are a few things you can improve on. I noticed that in both your posts this week your introduction were a bot dull and they could be stronger. Try getting a little more creative with your introduction so that the audience wants to keep reading. 

I liked your 9/30 post it was straight-forward and to the point. You let the audience know the main focus of your essay, the introduction was set up very nicely. One thing I think you can improve on is your transitions between paragraphs, there was no fluidity between your thoughts.